r0de0b0y
Member
|
Is this still the original aerial dragonfight, or am I thinking of another? Oh well, I missed the intro with the Dark Lord in his throne of doom. I liked that one better. That's quite a bit of text to be dealing with. Well, fetch me my wooden spoon of spell-checking. The show must go on. quote:
each motion sending concussion-inducing walls of air spiralling down to the ground far below. Only one "L", right? quote:
An ambrosial fragrance wafted into Elrohir's slitted nose, and he took a deep breath Ain't it just slit? I'm not sure how past-tense would work. Stupid spellcheck. quote:
Elrohir opened his great maw, took a lungful of air, and let forth a long gout of blue-orange flame Never seen this word before. My guess is correct as it is, lung full, or lungfull. IDK quote:
The plain scenery around him did not particularily thrill the red dragon Particularly? I've made that mistake hundreds of times... quote:
"Amazing, aren't they?" she sweeped an arm with a flourish at the statues Swept? Why must the english language be so...ugh quote:
You have proven yourself powerful and witful in the Dragon Wars I don't know about this...the correct form would be witty, but that doesn't sound right too... All the spellchecks this outdated machine could dredge. I liked this prologue for it's...sorta mystic feel and introduction into the world, but I miss the gloom and forboding hate of the throne scene too. Hope you're working on that one. Looks like I can't keep up with you anymore, so I'm afraid to judge. One thing bugs me, though, is the introduction of so many unfamiliar terms in the prologue, though the glossary helps. Well, that's my two and 1/2 cents. Bye now.
|