Firefly
Lore-ian
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A very nice way to set up the thread, Recar, and great work at bringing the holiday spirit into L&L! Happy early holidays, everyone! I've read and enjoyed the story. I'm debating doing one of the following: 1. Type up my old ugly horrible Christmas poems to post (Yes, I give y'all permission to laugh at me) 2. Write a new Christmas poem (My inspiration doesn't seem to be flowing, grr) 3. Write a Christmas story. 4. Tweak one of my other stories to make it Christmasy. I'm leaning on four atm, though it feels a bit like cheating... Anyhow, a few random points about your story, Recar. quote:
Warlic slammed the weathered tome onto the table, bringing forth a cloud of ancient dust that settled on its base. Imo, the adjective is clunky and unnecessary. quote:
There is… There is a chill in the air I can’t quite shake,” The Wizard said, I don't think "the" should be capitalized, since it's still part of the same sentence as the speech. Even if you're capitalizing wizard (which I don't recommend since it's a noun that's rather familiar to everyone), "the" should remain uncapitalized grammatically, no? quote:
In the midst of the tremor, neither mages recognised the book name Recar Dragonlance’s Tales of Fire had tumbled open. "recognised?" Oh, I think they'd recognize it since they were just talking about Recar... Maybe "realised" is the word you're looking for... The name, not the book, fell open? I think you meant to type "named" I hope the comments helped. ^_^ I'll have something for this collab soon.
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