Dwelling Dragonlord
ArchKnight AQ / OOC / L&L
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*Rises from the shadows.* quote:
Shadows walked off, leaving Odd behind too think about what just happened, He only thought for a moment and then decided to catch up with his new friend. to quote:
Shadows and Odd suddenly went black, their eyes yellow. This reminds me of tigerlady48's story about raven. quote:
backwards, The This happens quite a lot, either make the , a . or the T a t. That said, I notice you never end your sentences with a . quote:
None of them being any different too the other in terms of how the language was spoken. to quote:
Meanwhile, somewhere in dark castle.. If it's no dark castle in particular, it's "in a dark". Should it be a specific dark castle, it's "in the dark". quote:
All that he could remember his something about danger was The story, yes, the story. It's fairly enjoyable to read, though I find Rayne's motives a bit vague right now. I'm sure you have got that worked out for yourself and how you will incorporate that into your story.
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