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Meh, that's not that depressing to me, personally. For one, you'd think her father would have stated to have been mangled earlier, and the Alzheimer's desease has a good chance to only be mentioned in past tense. Along with that, given the fact that super heroes opperate under a secret identity, and do their work anonomously, I find it highly improbably that there would be any fund for them, and if so, that would give a good chance of their secret identity being discovered somewhat easily, which also makes it a somewhat bad option.
The backstory part about the war, the girlfrined and the welfare worker is very interesting, though, and would make a viable backstory.
Your chain of events also has her apparently becoming a super heroine to get payed, which, while being somewhat distasteful, and creating circumstances that could easily lead to the birth of villains, does somewhat make sense for her mindset, because if that was so, it would be psychologically easier to choose to take and sell the malachite.
While PTSD certainly would create a scary environment for a growing child, I personally do not find it to compatible with her personality, and if you are taking into account the last story, and the fact that Vector may be planning to use the father to talk to Experimental on a serious note before the war, like last time, Alzheimer's desease and PTSD would almost make his ability to have that much wisdom and lack of sorrow in his speach impossible, although he could use the oncoming war as a storyline trigger for his PTSD, which might have an interesting effect on the story, although it may or may not be better than a wise talking to. Hard to say.
Personally, I like my version of possibilities better, because yours almost seems to arbitrarilly put random horrors into her life that don't connect well with the character and the circumstances, and mine makes more sense, storyline wise.
Also, if her mother left at the age of 2, and she'd had to deal with the circumstances for almost the entirety of her life, while it would be hard, she would have gotten used to it, not known her, and her life of hardships would have seemed normal to her. Her coming into a fight with her mother in a climactic duel to the death sounds like it would be awesome, but would not have as much emotional impact on her as deadly fighting with a sibling, who had been there with you since birth would. In fact, I'd think it would be much easier to fight her mother in those circumstances, and doing so with her sister would give her a handicap which could potentially get her killed, even if she brings her down, because her sister would take such an opportunity to strike out against her rather dishonorably, and gain victory like that. (that would also give a good point of drama for Experimental/Psi at which he would kill her in his rage, and then when Demolicious survives, their relationship would be strained)
Also, with the shock of her mother actually dieing in front of her eyes, her sister leaving to go against everything she believes in, and abandoning her dad, and then her dad potentially dying, the emotional trauma would have been more terrible than if her dad died after many years of torturous life, and her mother having abandoned her.
Sorry that I am going against your will, Vector. I will not post on the matter again, unless you comment on it.
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