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Aaaaah... The Hunger Games is shaping up to be a good book. :)
That aside, as I was doing that earlier, and I am doing this now, I think I shall read a bit more of this story.
Qyp has an interesting writing style... A few grammatical errors here and there, a few things that could be phrased better, overall, but very good. Hmm... Makes me wonder just who the person who took him was. He has quite a bit of potential; I look foreward to reading more of his work, which shall be easy to come by, with his own story out. ;)
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@Chapter/part 7:
Unconcious, eh? I wonder if that gurney would be able to hold him, if he wasn't... I am stragely fond of that bird. I don't really know for certain why, but I'd have to say that due to the fact that it is a crow (and crows are inherantly awesome, as you well know), and it has a cybernetic eye (which makes it even cooler), I automatically liked it, and I probably had no other reason. I mourn its passing. T_T
Spelled telekenesis incorrectly... but no matter. I don't really care so much about that to make a big fuss of it.
Good call, choosing to move him, btw. Personally, I'd have thought you'd have an easier way to get to the airship, though.
This reminds me... Now that the Dealer's gone, who will replace you in the company, hmm?Then again, you might've decided that and stated it in a later chapter. I don't know. *shrugs*
Yet again, the knights' temperment intrigues me. I wonder if the ones who attacked Darkness were not junior members of the Brotherhood. I don't know why; They just seem like they don't have the experience and demeanor of a veteran...
Must've been a very quick opperation, the rescue of Darkness King, there... As I suspected, the captive was able to break free. Hmm... I suppose that's the end of that plot thread, though his captivity and defeat could be somehow tied into the flow of parts that focus on what the knights are doing behind the scenes, like Goldstein's chapter/s seem to (which I appreciate very much, btw; Kudos for understandign the need, and filling the niche).
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On to Zeuzt's chapter, which annoyingly expands the window , and requires me to scroll to the right, if I don't want it maximized. -.-
I agree with SL9K (at least I think it was him) on this one... the comment about it smelling like cheese was quite odd. Quite odd, indeed...
Knights have pockets?
*cringes at the repeated lapses of grammar* (sorry, but even for me, that is difficult ot understand, at times)
I am disappointed in that knight in particular's intelligence. Overzealousness I can understand, but I think he reacts too much, and resorted to violence too easily. Then again, what are you to do, when someone attacks you like that, and shows distain towards the message you give (in those circumstances, I'd say that's a bigger factor than it would be normally)? Regardless, he in particular annoys me.
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"My my haha exellent armor only if the knight was'nt stupid it would have been a great combo."
I don't quite understand what he meant by this...
Mr. Maximum is indestructible? O.o (CURSE YOU, PLOTHOLES!!!)
I wonderedjust how powerful those flames were... I suppose it was worth it to read, afterall. Interesting turn of events, nonetheless, even if it was not the best possible way to convey it...
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Time to see about what's occuring with regards to the police, it would seem. I bet this will be interesting, and it will almost certainly give good background information for future reference...
I like seeing how this machine percieves things. You can almost imagine the protocols programed into the thing.
Hmm... At least this knight appears to be sensible enough to discuss things before leaping at their throats for even the suggestion that the Brotherhood could be wrong. XP
Reminds me of the religious zeal behind radical Islamic terrorist actions. :/
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The punched crumpled GPB's fist but he wasn't done yet he held the Knight at his' shoulder and punched and punched at his one arm.
That's quite a bit of force, put into those blows...
And he was able to somehow gain a piece of the knight's armor, as well? That could lead to important things, later on, potentially...
A few lapses in grammar, but meh. It's good enough not to matter. Pity about what happened to the police station...
I like that the Police Chief's last words were somewhat garbled and disorderly. Makes it seem more realistic, and yet he was still able to get the message across. :)
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I think I'll take a break for a bit... I wanted to get to Zafara's chapter before stopping, but I think I'll come back to reading this, and get at least that far...
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