Gingkage -> RE: (DF) Fairy Saga Discussion Thread! (10/7/2011 15:35:42)
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I'm probably not as thorough as Mritha, but here are some I found in the third chapter. quote:
"Mother Fairy: Just on time soldier, these two hooligans have caused enough trouble for us and need to be evacuated out of the kingdom at once!" 'Evacuated' should probably be *exiled or *escorted, I'm not sure what you meant here, but I would use one of those words if it were me. Just a suggestion, though. quote:
"Mritha: YOUR THE LOSER!" Your should be *YOU'RE. quote:
"Stephen Nix: I knew I should've just thrown you back in the book where you cam from! You'll be sorry for that little mistake!" *Came, not cam. quote:
"Stephen Nix: Pipe down, loser hero! Your not going anywhere just yet!" Your should be *You're. quote:
"Mystic Mother: *grinds his teeth then sighs* Your right." Again, it should say 'you're.' quote:
"Stephen Nix: Were going to depart right now but if you wish to ever see Kyle again, I suggest you send your strongest warriors to my fortress, WE will be waiting!" It should read 'We're.'
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