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Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/2/2012 18:54:50)

Eh, it will have to gain more readers at some point. L&L seems to be somewhat dead lately. But anyhow, I'd encourage you to keep writing anyways, just to have the satisfaction of getting your story out there.

However, I am noticing it seems to jump around a lot. Perhaps slow down a bit, each chapter does not have to cover such monumental events so quickly.



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/2/2012 23:26:25)

Oh, ok



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/4/2012 15:13:37)

After 2 deaths in my family over the weekend ive found enough clarity to start writing again so stay tuned



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/8/2012 22:48:05)

1/4 of chapter 4 finished



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/9/2012 0:05:17)

One thing I don't understand. What exactly is a Dragoon? The resident half dragon race in the AEverse are the Vartai, and they are hardly extinct.



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/9/2012 16:24:33)

Dragoon are genetically engineered Vartai



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/19/2012 19:47:54)

Chapter 4 is done,however its short



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/19/2012 21:07:54)

Well, looks like Damien's back. Wait, I'm missing something or just forgot, he time travelled as well? Well, I suppose that is obvious...



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/19/2012 21:32:56)

Yea he did



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/23/2012 16:44:15)

Extended the ending a bit, to show Damian's capability



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (3/30/2012 11:48:23)

Chapter 5 started



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 1:00:08)

Caught up so far.

So that Damian...wasn't Damian?

Also, Dragean?



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 18:08:42)

Oh yea, the Dragean. They aren't dragon but share most qualities of one. They are anything from a demon to a human. Dragean actually have dragon lineage but aren't dragons themselves

Just showing a glimpse of Damian's "special" abilities



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 20:07:23)

Concluded chapter 5.

Might write more tonight in chapter 6



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 20:14:11)

I just meant as far as the Dragean's mention. Maybe from now on, when you introduce a new concept, you could have a character explain it?

I also think lengthening your chapters a little would help with character development.



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 20:15:42)

I'm doing this all on a kindle fire. Its tough. I promise chapter 6 will be lengthy



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 20:36:27)

Ah gotcha, yeah typing from mobile kinda sucks.



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 20:42:55)

What did you think of chapter 5



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 20:46:19)

Seems a bit cliffhangery, like a bridge chapter almost. Have a feeling the next few will be more eventful (i.e. training chapter, then the war starts, and so-on).



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/2/2012 21:04:32)

1/10 of chapter 6 is complete. My kindle is dying.



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/3/2012 17:55:50)

Another small piece.

Curse this kindle of mines



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/3/2012 20:21:53)

And another link. Hopefully my comp works 2mm



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/5/2012 20:24:25)

Just a bit more xD



VanHellsin24 -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/5/2012 23:49:05)

Its FINISHED!



Glais -> RE: (DF) The Grimm Tales of Van Hellsin Commentary (4/6/2012 1:13:17)

Ok so read it.

Acheron honestly, just seems very cliche to me.

Anyhow, so now Tomix is involved, and a big Darkness Dragon....oh and Crow has Energy powers.

I have to wonder, if Crow's from the future, why does his family live in normal DF?



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