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Maureu -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/3/2009 1:17:14)

I'm sure whichever you choose, it will be on par with the other chapters.

However, of the various flaws I have seen (/s), there was one I'd like to point out:
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"Lovely day chaps, excellent job. We’ll be in for the early morning tea break in a few minutes… why don’t y’all head in early, and I’ll finish up the shift?” he offered, speaking in his New Grand Accent.


The mix-matching of accents here really bothers me. It (slang) is alright for other characters, but when you give someone a specific accent and then throw in something out of place, it just messes with the flow. Not sure if this has been pointed out yet, but I'm sure you value my input regardless.[:D]

Also, the story has progressed very nicely, though I would speak against using slang in general. Have fun with it until I can next get on to critique you.

Owning/claiming pages isnt allowed. ~GG



BadHulk -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/3/2009 17:16:35)

Wait wait wait.... A training!? What the... What for training? >.>



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/3/2009 18:11:30)

Ah, but remember that the New Grand Kingdom will be filled with fake/cheezy British accents so you'll have to get over it.

What for? Silly Hulk, they just reached level 30, all new shenanigans await in this epic chapter! :o



Snake XZ -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/3/2009 22:58:48)

Hmm, I should probably get cracking on those dates. Anyways, I still can't stop reading... It's too good and funny. Plus I just can't wait to see what problems they'll get into with NIGHTVISION! Yes, I remember that from the chapter where he made the pact with the Death element. hehe! So much awesomeness! Plus those shenanigans better involve some form of mauling, whether it be reaver or grim... maybe a grimball game? I must go ponder what shall occur... and Grim, I will figure out a way to silence you eventually.



BadHulk -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/5/2009 11:14:04)

Ah Pie... That explained much o.O(Bit late reaction as I had a cursus yesterday and I have HW, a GF and a social life ofc :P)


Edit: When is the next chapter comming up?



Shreder -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/11/2009 1:41:45)

I just read through the whole thing in a couple hours. Wow. Just wow. Ever think about publishing? If this were a real book I would totally buy it. Write more!



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/12/2009 15:26:36)

Awww, thanks.

Next chapter... no promises, but UT tends to get harder during the last two weeks of november as the professers cram stuff before school ends, so... I'll try, but no promises by the end of this weekend.



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/16/2009 22:16:33)

Here ye Here ye, I bring thee great tidings of joy for all people... maybe!

Good news: The next chapter is finally up! (YAY!)

Bad news: I got side tracked, I'll be honest. I finally figured out how to give The Talk, and I couldn't wait any longer to introduce it to y'all. So, instead of shenanigans, I gave y'all an extremely mindboggling perspective of how the Fictional Omniverse works! Please note that this is not the only part of "The Talk", but it includes a vast majority of information.

If you have any questions, please feel free to ask here, and Grim will be explaining them in the next chapter as Necro secretly consults Grim for more information on the Fictional Omniverse! :o

Also, the next chapter WILL have shenanigans, I do appologise for the cliff hanger. Enjoy!



Shreder -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 1:32:36)

What can I say? More good stuff. Keep it up!



Silver1 -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 2:55:37)

Great new chapter.



BadHulk -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 11:10:40)

Its cool that you introduced your self XD.

Anyway 3 points:

This was a very bad move, because the longer you were in that forum

I assume you ment Form? XD Forum nah >.> Thats an omnispace made by us, the forummites.

2. Replace this link with the 1 in the first post of your story.

3. Great chapter!



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 11:51:04)

Fixed!I'm surprised no one is mind boggled by the enormitiy of what has been revealed to you, or just plain confused :o



deathwalker05 -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 15:00:04)

.....wow
Don;t think theres any other thing to say.



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 15:21:17)

See, THAT is the exact sort of "your mind has been blown, thank you very much" reactions I was going for. I'm satisfiied now.

Next chapter should hopefully be up by the end of American Thanksgiving weekend. AKA, give me roughly 2 weeks.



ringulreith -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 17:59:39)

...
WOW
...

Oh yes, did I mention I HATE you?
Absolutely, completely HATE you?



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 19:35:50)

Why, because your mind has been so blown away by the sheer enormity of what I have introduced? :o



Snake XZ -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 20:26:37)

Wow.... so much info.... So any idea/dream/belief etc goes into one of these bloody omniverses? and that if a writer has enough passion, his characters can come to "life"? AND FINALLY HE GOT NIGHT VISION!!!!!!!!! YEAH!!!!!!! WOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!



ringulreith -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 20:43:53)

No, Pie, because you're a sick, cruel person that likes to leave us hanging at the first mention of "shenanigans".

Though, that revelation was... Unexpected, to say the least. Good job, and keep writing! (or else!)



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 22:32:37)

Oh, yeah, the cliffhanger. I forsaw HAYT about that, muhahahahahahahaha! :P



Shreder -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 22:35:41)

You foresaw correctly. [:@] Oh and why the avvy change? I liked the old one better.



Ultrapowerpie -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 22:50:23)

To signify my shift from a moogle with a large spear to a mischivious moogle to better explain the cliff hanger? :D



Shreder -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/17/2009 22:53:05)

Ah I see. Well anyways can't wait to read more. *wink wink nudge nudge*



Snake XZ -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/18/2009 0:26:31)

Hey Pie, I was wonderin. IF Necro gets Night vision at Level 30, does that mean Reaver gets infrared? And Jenna can see under water? And Loki.... can see something? I don't know, but does it work like that?



BadHulk -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/18/2009 1:14:18)

I assume Pie's avatar looks like his main character, Necro.



Snake XZ -> RE: The Reaper's Records: Chronicles of Tipa Comments II (11/18/2009 19:37:40)

I assumed it was a moogle that was in Organization XIII cause that cloak looks very much like the cloaks worn by the members... anyways, I'm still trying to comprehend the massive amount of info that was given to us...



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