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Faerdin -> RE: (DF) Legendium's Tale (WIP) Discussion Thread (4/21/2013 7:25:27)
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Leaping back in! Sorry for my absence; school has been keeping me dreadfully busy. Dx
Chapter Five
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When I woke, I was lying on a bed in a room lit by candle light.
When I woke, I was lying on a bed in a room lit by candlelight.
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Under the cloak, he wore a dark chest-plate, that looked tarnished from use.
Under the cloak, he wore a dark chestplate, that looked tarnished from use.
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It seemed to last a while before he said
"Go home boy. Doomwood is no place for a child. You're lucky to still be alive." It seemed to last a while before he spoke.
"Go home, boy. Doomwood is no place for a child. You're lucky to still be alive."
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In my mind flashed pictures of Aspeth lying on the ground, drowing in her own blood.
In my mind flashed pictures of Aspeth lying on the ground, drowning in her own blood.
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"Boy, nowhere is worse then Doomwood. This forest is hell itself. Whatever comes here unprotected by light or darkness never makes it out. You're lucky to have made it this far, but luck doesn't always prevail. Turn back before it's too late."
"Boy, nowhere is worse than Doomwood. This forest is hell itself. Whatever comes here unprotected by light or darkness never makes it out. You're lucky to have made it this far, but luck doesn't always prevail. Turn back before it's too late."
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"... I will not sway you're decision. So do you stay, or do you go?"
"... I will not sway your decision. So do you stay, or do you go?"
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"Legendium. And your's?"
"Legendium. And yours?"
("Your" is already possessive, and so the apostrophe is not needed)
Chapter Six
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Ah, he remember Dariut quite well.
Ah, he remembered Dariut quite well.
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But then I remembered that the house was in was situated in a small settlement, which seemed uninhabited.
But then I remembered that the house I was in was situated in a small settlement, which seemed uninhabited.
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The plaque at it's base was large enough to read from where I stood.
The plaque at its base was large enough to read from where I stood.
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I felt something like Deja-Vu right then.
I felt something like deja-vu right then. (Unless capitalized for a specific reason)
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It seemed like Dariut had experienced everything I had; but got the worse of it.
It seemed like Dariut had experienced everything I had, but got the worse of it. (Semicolons usually signify a change in the topic of a sentence; they are used almost like periods, but without ending a sentence)
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Well, that explains it, I thought.
Well, that explains it, I thought. (Italics usually have two uses in literature: to emphasize a word or phrase, or to display the thoughts of a character)
Chapter Seven
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Dariut pulled his sword out from it's scabbard on his back...
Dariut pulled his sword out from its scabbard on his back...
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Luckily I still had the reflexes from my time in the duelist club, or I would have been cloven in two by now.
Luckily, I still had the reflexes from my time in the duelist club, or I would have been cloven in two by then.
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Before I could respond, Dariut threw me a shield and said “Keep the hammer for now. Meet me at the statue again.”
Before I could respond, Dariut threw me a shield and said, “Keep the hammer for now. Meet me at the statue again.”
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He smiled, and said “I think that you’re ready to start learning magic now.”
He smiled, and said, “I think that you’re ready to start learning magic now.”
The only problem I can really think of is how quickly Tobias had learned and defeated a trained paladin. Aside from that, your story is coming along very well. ^_^
As for information on paladins and their magic... We know little of paladins in Dragonfable, but Artix does define a paladin here:
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Artix: A Paladin is a warrior of good who has dedicated their life to thrawting evil and protecting those in need.
Artix: Through love and faith a Paladin is granted the power to overcome great evil.
Artix: There are many different types of Paladins... perhaps you would like to train as a Paladin one day.
Artix: I would be honored to share with you what I have learned once we have a handle on this undead situation.
Aside from very specific forms of magic for which paladins are widely known, it can be assumed that being a paladin is more so a lifestyle than a form of magic. In addition, due to the flexibility of Lore's system of magic, it can also be assumed that paladins (Like necromancers) are not limited to their stereotypical element. While most paladins pledge themselves to the light, by no means does that make service to the light a qualification for a paladin (I believe Dracelix's character is actually an ice paladin, for example). What is most important is their ability to love, to feel compassion for others, and to have the willingness to guard common people from evil (Often undead).
Paladins do have some constant themes in terms of their magic, however.
1) Their spells are tailored to be more powerful against the undead and evil in general.
2) Paladins are very knowledgeable healers.
3) Some paladins are capable of limited resurrection (In the AE universe, they have only ever been capable of self-resurrection). However, resurrection is not limited only to paladins (Nythera resurrects Warlic, Xan attempts to resurrect Warlic, etc.).
4) Paladins are capable of purging inanimate objects and living beings of alien life forces (Purification).
I hope this helps. ^_^
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