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12/9/2009 15:05:44   
Willkill12
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Comments for my story for Unknown Soldier, located here:



< Message edited by Willkill12 -- 12/9/2009 15:12:39 >
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12/9/2009 20:15:06   
ringulreith
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Hmm. I like it. My only advice is to try adding more commas to the story. I won't quote where, that'd be too long. But read the story out loud. You'll know when to add a comma. Otherwise, pretty good. You have a good descriptive style. I like it.
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12/10/2009 16:49:02   
Willkill12
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Thanks, I'll be sure to do that ;)
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