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12/9/2009 15:05:44

Willkill12
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Comments for my story for Unknown Soldier, located here:

< Message edited by Willkill12 -- 12/9/2009 15:12:39 >

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12/9/2009 20:15:06

ringulreith
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Hmm. I like it. My only advice is to try adding more commas to the story. I won't quote where, that'd be too long. But read the story out loud. You'll know when to add a comma. Otherwise, pretty good. You have a good descriptive style. I like it.

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12/10/2009 16:49:02

Willkill12
Member

Thanks, I'll be sure to do that ;)

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