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Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/13/2009 8:29:40)

Fine... I'll edit more description to it :)

After I do some stuff of course. Or... you could wikipedia siege tower




UrufuHiken -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/13/2009 16:53:44)

AHA! Behold the pit that is wooden!!!




Helixi -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/13/2009 16:55:35)

I thought you'd given up on this Crimz. I'm too tired to read it now, but I can read it tomorrow morning. :)




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/13/2009 21:32:45)

@UrufuHiken, lol, enough with the wooden pit (though expect some mroe on chapter 5)

Okay, here's the descriptions of the "wooden pit"

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The knights boarded their siege towers, wooden siege engines designed to serve as protection for a charging unit. As the name suggests, the vehicle had the rectangular framework of a tower. On each corner, a wheel was positioned to allow locomotion.


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Asher grabbed onto the sides of a ladder positioned at the tower’s rear end. After ascending what had seemed to be a wall, he took a step forward, then crouching before descending the hole, the entrance fixed atop the siege’s roof.

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The young man climbed the inner ladder, exiting his head and upper body from the tower.


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"There’s a front door, Asher. I suggest you use it next time when garrisoning into the siege tower,” the Sentinel informed, expressing a bit of laughter as he enlightened the boy.


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Alexander widened his grin. The Myrmidon bent his legs, then sprang up, grabbing onto the siege engine’s wooden ram, a tree trunk carved, giving it a design and smoothness.


@Helix: with my past works unfinished... I wont let this suffer the same fate.




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/17/2009 4:40:53)

Okay, so far... chapter 5's writing progession is okay. Though I still want a... unique yet good way in seperating scenes (trust me... they change often).




UrufuHiken -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/18/2009 20:27:09)

[sm=fun_08.gif]

Now I am happy!




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (5/24/2009 10:29:59)

Hehehe... SOMEONE loves the wooden pit as same as Asher. Dont worry... the wooden pit will be a running gag...

Anyways... spoilers (not story spoilers... more on... LoL spoliers)

spoiler:


What to expect:
Krey and the Genie!
The last piece of sushi
More wooden pits!




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/25/2009 7:43:13)

And chapter is... posted! Weeee!




Gianna Glow -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/25/2009 11:19:09)

Hey, just read you're story. Its awesome! Keep up the good work... and i'll actually read it through sometime looking for problems... too tired to do it now. Just wanted to say its really good and i enjoyed it.




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/27/2009 1:06:07)

Thanks :)

So up to what part are you? And I'd appreciate if you told me what part you liked best :)




Helixi -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/27/2009 15:20:27)

I'm actually too lazy to read from where I was because I can't find it, so I'll go from the beginning. I may be some time.




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/27/2009 21:02:03)

Take your time, Helix [;)]

Anyways, heh, it's bee 2 months since I began. Man, I feel kinda slow with this thing.

Oh, and I just reread my works... and I spotted a few typos...[8D]




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/29/2009 6:50:23)

Okay... a mini-chapter has been posted. Chapter 6 is dedicated to the last humor portion of the story.... for now.

Anyways, the "real" chapter 6 is halfway done. SInce I'm bored with my life (xD), I'm spending more time on this.




UrufuHiken -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/25 (5/30/2009 18:42:22)

haha, angsty people are funny when they're drunk!




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/31 (5/31/2009 10:45:00)

@ UrufuHiken: xD

Okay, updated as of this time!

If you've noticed, the scenes shift from Navith, back to the Vanguard Flanc. Tell me if you cant keep up or anything, k?




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/31 (6/1/2009 9:56:05)

Progress Report:

Chapter 8 is halfway done. However, I find the way it has been written so far to be quite disappointing. I am not used to writing much intense action scenes, so I'll have to take a lot of time in editting.




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 6/3 (6/3/2009 0:50:57)

Updated :D




Gianna Glow -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 6/3 (6/3/2009 1:45:15)

This is very good. I'm enjoying it. *grumbles about girl's always losing first in most books/movies* ahem, sorry about that. [:D] Awesome though!




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 6/3 (6/3/2009 2:21:48)

She didnt lose first... her target did (yet she was taken out 3 seconds later xD)




bobby1013852 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (6/3/2009 17:59:17)

am i in the story yet




Helixi -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (6/4/2009 3:56:40)

I'm up to Aaron's fight. I have been busy. Nevertheless, I intend to use my day off school to finish it. Or, I'll just print it off and read it in bed. xD




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 5/11 (6/4/2009 4:53:44)

@bobby1013852: Chapter 3: Julian Scarclet

@Helix: Heh, whatver methods suits, you then. Thanks for the read (dont worry, sorry gets interesting after Chapter 3)




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 6/12 (6/12/2009 3:43:09)

Sorry for the late update guys. Chapter 8 inspired me to draw this: http://i290.photobucket.com/albums/ll271/g3ev/KreyNColor.jpg

Heh, I hope the character pic helps you visualize the story




Crimzon5 -> RE: Myrmidon - Comments and pics - 6/12 (7/8/2009 8:06:02)

Sorry for the late update... but heh, chapter 10 is here.

And just that you know, my current avatar is how I portray Asher :D




Crimzon5 -> Myrmidon Rewrites (8/1/2009 10:36:50)

Story: http://forums2.battleon.com/f/tm.asp?m=16425289

Yeah... it got rewritten.

Throw comments and insults critiques if you want... they help :D




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