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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Mortarion's collection of tomes (7/21/2012 16:30:21)
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As per request.
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It was a beautiful morning, Mortarion, <>, was walking in the woods near falconreach when he found someone
a short description of Mortarion.
Or you could turn it into something like this.
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It was a beatiful morning or so the man walking in the woods near Falconreach thought. His name was Mortarion, <short physical description and possibly personal reasons for his walk> who was taken by surprise to find someone ....
I can't quite understand what you mean by "who had all of his ropes destroyed was famelic".
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It was a beutiful day in willowshire but this was a cruel joke as the city was in ruins, of it only remained a refugee camp, in this morning a messenger walked trought it, searching for a horse; he had been tasked by guardian fortuna to deliver a message to falconreach asking for their help.
As you can see the messenger has more of a description than the protagonist, though he could do with a brief description.
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In their chatting, they didn't notice that a woman had approached them. She was a statuesque, auburn-haired beauty, and when she spoke all of the heroes turned to face her, yet she didn't seem scared.
flustered (I don't see why she would become scared in the presence of the heroes a.k.a. good guys.)
Do you have a specific reason as to why you have 2 different font-sizes?
That's all for now.
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