ArchKnight AQ / OOC / L&L
This feedback is for the Intro and Chapter I of "The Wilting Rose".
As not to divert resources from Amityvale and elsewhere, a team was set to be assembled and begin their investigation, corroborating with The Rose stationed in the walled town as well as conduct interviews with the townspeople to find out all that they could about the alleged town of Arkham and its asylum.
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She looked directly at him, the glasses magnifying her green eyes, showing she's not blind which was a relief.
that she wasn't, came as
Skimming the roster, all but one of them had multiple infractions and disciplinaries for various forms of misconduct that it's surprising they are still within the ranks of The Rose.
it was, were
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