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Sagrym -> RE: Locations/Quests/Events/Shops (8/10/2015 12:04:41)
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Corrections for:
Sir Vey's Camp:
As you acces it from Oaklore, seems unnecessary to add directions from Falconreach, so I suggest to make it simplier:
Location: Oaklore Keep -> Sir Valance -> Sir Vey's Camp
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Level/Quest/Items required: Completion of Sneevil Boxopolis
it's also required to have level 5
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Shop
Sir Vey: I know that I can trust you. I'll trade you some items that you can use in exchange for your Pouches of Sparkling Sand.
"your" isn't written (can be corrected also in Sir Vey's Shop)
Oaklore Keep (Books 1 and 2):
quote:
Quests Available
Captain Rolith
Obsidian Tog
Obsidian Tog is rare now, so it could get the strike tags
Also you can add 1 more quest:
Pac-toginal-tastic
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Sir Vivor and Sir Casm
Vurrmen Ruins
The VurrMen Ruins
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Sir Prize
Worst Prank Ever
The Worst Prank Ever
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Sir Ano
There’s No Place like Oaklore
There's No Place Like Oaklore
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Shops
IronWood Box
Ironwood Box
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Captain Rolith: Welcome to Oaklore Keep, home to the honarable Knights of the Pactagonal Table.
"Oaklore Keep" should be bolded, honorable, Pactogonal
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Offical Keep Quests
Captain Rolith: These Knight are at their stations throughout the Keep - all of them have different places to guard, and may need your help!
Oaklore Keep Quests!
Captain Rolith: These Knights (and their quests) are at their stations throughout the Keep. All of them have different places to guard, and may need your help!
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Falconreach
Captain Rolith: Falconreach is just over the bridge if you follow the past east. Beware of the giant Sea Serpent wich has been attacking the travelers!
Falconreach!
Captain Rolith: Falconreach is just over the bridge if you follow the path east. Beware of the giant Sea Serpent which has been attacking travelers!
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Talk
Captain Rolith: I am Rolith, Captain of the Knights of the Patagonal Table here at the Keep.
Captain Rolith: The Keep stands here to protect all the subjects of good King Alteon.
"Rolith" should be bolded, Pactogonal, "King Alteon" should be bolded
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Captain Rolith: You seem very able. Please , lend a hand to any of the knights that you can.
no space between "Please" and comma
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Where can I spend Dragon Coins?
Captain Rolith: Cyesro's Superstore is in the town of Falconreach. You will find merchants that will take Dragon Coins all over Lore though.
Cysero
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Where can I find/upgrade my stats?
Captain Rolith: As you level up you'll gain more stat points. Choosing the Train Stats option while talking with me will let you use them!
a comma after "up"
Sir Valance's color code could be added:
[b][color=#006666]Sir Valance:[/color][/b]
quote:
Sir Valance: We must be ever vigilant! Sneevils, the vile box obsessed creatures have been stealing every box in the area!
obessed (typo)
Above this line
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Sir Valance: At last! This box contains a shipment of enchanted rings given by Good King Alteon. It cost him a fortune but worth every coin to defend this Keep
you can add:
Reward Chest
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Sir Valance: At last! This box contains a shipment of enchanted rings given by Good King Alteon. It cost him a fortune but worth every coin to defend this Keep
given to us, keep and a point after it
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Sir Valance: It cost him a fortune but it will be worth every gold coin. These rings are just what we knights need to better defend Oaklore Keep
Sir Valance: Here, you've earned one. As far as I'm concerned, you're an Honorary Knight of the Pactagonal Table, <Class>. Thank you
a point at the end (after "Oaklore Keep"), i'm (typo), Pactogonal, a point after "Thank you"
Above this line
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Sir Valance: Sir Vey is one of the kingdom’s best naturalists! He studies all the plants and wildlife in Oaklore forest
you could add:
Sir Vey's Camp!
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Sir Valance: Sir Vey is one of the kingdom’s best naturalists! He studies all the plants and wildlife in Oaklore forest
a point at the end (after "forest")
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Sir Valance: Thanks to you, we have the Sneevil problem under control. Would you go help him at his camp?
sneevil
Maya's color code could be added:
[b][color=#cc6666]Maya:[/color][/b]
Above this line
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Maya: Do you like books? I love them! Especially rare ones. If you find rare books, please bring them to me.
you can add:
Talk
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Maya: Do you like books? I love them! Especially rare ones. If you find rare books, please bring them to me.
the last sentence should all be bolded
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Maya: As the keeps Loremaster it is my duty to record the deeds of the knights and research the local history and folktales of Oaklore
keep's, a point at the end
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Maya: That means I have to interview people and visit local places, but most of my research comes from these wonderful books!
Maya: Some rare books contain legends, stories and secrets. Other tomes contain the works of thinkers, inventors and mages.
means that I, intreview (typo), of great thinkers
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Maya: Depending on the rare book you find, I will reward you with different rare items. Hopefully they will help you in your future adventures.
"rare" isn't written, books, the first sentence should all be bolded
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Maya: Perhaps we can have an adventure together! Although I am much better with a book than a sword.
the last sentence should have italic tags
Above this line
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Maya: Captain Rolith and his Knights in this keep could use a hand. If you walk up and talk to them they will give you quests.
you can add:
Quests
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Maya: Captain Rolith and his Knights in this keep could use a hand. If you walk up and talk to them they will give you quests.
"Captain Rolith" should be bolded, and many of his knights
Above this line
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Maya: Would you like to make Oaklore Keep your home town?
you can add:
Set Home Town
And after it you can add:
- Yes
Maya: Let me finish writing this down. There we go! Your home town is now Oaklore Keep!
Above this line
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Maya: Oh! Have you found any books Perhaps an ancient tome? Maybe you've found a history scroll
you can add:
Book Delivery!
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Maya: Oh! Have you found any books Perhaps an ancient tome? Maybe you've found a history scroll
some, "books" should be bolded and after it comes a question mark, and a question mark at the end (after "scroll")
Above this line
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Sir Vivor: Hey watch this! We developed the fastest way to travel in the Kingdom!
you can add:
Talk
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Sir Casm: Ohhh yeah this is reeeeeaallly going to work.....
Sir Vivor: If it does work... maybe we can find the ancient ruins containing Sir Jing's Legendary Lightning Blade
3 points after "yeah", This, an exclamation mark at the end (after "Blade") and should be bolded too
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Sir Casm: Suuuuure we will. Just like the last dozen times we tried right
a question mark at the end (after "right")
Sir Junn is missing some dialog:
Heal
Sir Junn: Let me tend to your wounds. We cover all PPO and HMO plans. There you go... good as new!
Potions
Sir Junn: There, I refilled your potions for you. You can use potions to restore your health and mana during battle.
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Sir Chandestroy: I say it is time for war! Let’s take the fight back to the Vurrmen! But you cannot battle on an empty stomach, have you been to the mess hall?
Lets
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Sir Annaid:... and that is when I sang my heart out, confessing my true love for her.
a space between the name and the 3 points
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Sir Mise: I would surmise that things did not go well considering this is your 5th mug of Exotic NON- alcoholics beverage
Exotic NON- alchololic beverage (all this should be bolded instead of the italic tags), and a point at the end
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Sir Preem: Welcome brave Hero! We are the Knights of the Pactagonal Table and we welcome you to join us in tales of glory and adventure!
Pactogonal
Above this line
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Sir Gent: Our greatest threat is the Vurr'men attacks on our keep. I am concerned that my men will be soon overrun.
you can add:
Talk
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Sir Gent: Our greatest threat is the Vurr'men attacks on our keep. I am concerned that my men will be soon overrun.
soon be
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Sir Preem: ... and soon we must resume our quest for Furfur's rumored Semi Holy Grande Pumpkin-spice Cappuccino
a point at the end
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Sir Tax: Oooh, ooh, and then we can tax all the villagers until they cannot afford food! Then we can send in thugs to beat them up!
Sir Preem: Sir Tax, you do realize the Knights of the Pactagonal Table are good guys... right?
Sir Tax: Oh! Right... sorry.... Whew, almost blew my cover there
1 more "o", Pactoganal, 1 more point after "sorry", a point at the end (after "there")
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Sir Tax: Um.... To the Knights of the Pactagonal Table!
Pactogonal
Above this line
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Sir Kull: Sir Tainly... *coughs* Certainly you must be joking? The Pactagon is one of the most basic shapes!
you can add:
Pac-tog-whaa?
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Sir Kull: Sir Tainly... *coughs* Certainly you must be joking? The Pactagon is one of the most basic shapes!
should be bolded
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Sir Tax: The Pactogram is a symbol of everything that is good and just! All Hail the Knights of the Pactagonal table!
Pactogonal
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Sir Harry: What? Is someone here? You know hey tied me up facing a wall... Are you guys trying to trick me again?
there, they
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Sir Thomas: We are the Knights of The Pellet Table!
the
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Sir Harry: I wanted to see a play! Now all I can see is this stupid wall... I can't even look at the broken key boards they throw in at us.
1 more point after "wall"
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<Character> (thinks): I... don't know if I want to get involved in this.... Their story is crazy! They have food...I'm sure Rolith will find them.
coulde be changed to: <Character> (thinking):, a space between the 3 points and "I'm"
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Sir Pluss: I have lots of surplus weapons to sell and I'm open Knight and day! You will need a Dragon Amulet to use these weapons.
should have italic tags
Sir Rated's color code could be added:
[b][color=#006666]Sir Rated:[/color][/b]
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Sir Rated: You can get shinier gear in higher levels in the town of Falconreach. Talk to Sir Pent by the Bridge. It's been knights talking to you!
bridge
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Sir Loin: We have hungry Knights to feed and somehow Tuskmongers keep getting into our garden and eating all the vegetables!
vegatables (typo)
Above this line
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Sir Loin: ... eh hold on a sec. How is the grub boys?
you can add:
Talk
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Sir Reeyal: This Captain Rhubarb Crunch is the best! ... and a great source of calcium with milk!
Milk
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Sir Loin: These Knights eat so much it is hard to keep up. Especially with the Tuskmongers raiding our garden!
Sir Loin: You look like a brave <class> so I will make you a deal.
Sir Loin: Help me keep the garden clear of Tuskmongers when you stop by and in exchange all your meals are on the house
these lines should be deleted as they are already written
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Sir Deen: Hey! These Sardines taste fishy... can I have Steak instead?
these
Above this line
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Sir Loin: What would you like me to make for you?
you can add:
Eat
Above this line
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Sir Loin: Would you like me to super duper size that for you?
you can add:
- Green Slime Jelllllo/Doom Burger/Chickencow/Chocolate Cake
And below it is 1 more line:
- Yes/No
Sir Loin: Mmmmmm that looks delicious! Enjoy!
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Sir Pernatural: Do you believe in Ghosts, Vampires and the living sorta-but not-really dead? They are real... I have proof!
Sir Pernatural: Do you believe in Ghosts, Spirits and the Living Sorta-But-Not-Really Dead? They are real... I have proof!
Above this line
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Sir Pernatural: Sir Koffagus was one of our greatest weapon masters. He had a HUGE weapon collection.
you can add:
Ghosts?
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Sir Pernatural: Sir Koffagus was one of our greatest weapon masters. He had a HUGE weapon collection.
should be bolded
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Sir Pernatural: It is said that Sir Koffagus rises from his eternal slumber to challenge Adventures who visit his tomb.
challenge Adventurers who visit his tomb (all this should be bolded)
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Sir Pernatural: ... and if you beat him *whispers* He will give you something from his collection! Do you want to go?
4 points after him, a weapon
Sir Ano's color code could be added:
[b][color=#0066cc]Sir Ano:[/color][/b]
quote:
Sir Ano: Greetings, <You>, and welcome again to Oaklore Keep. Rest a bit, I'm sure your travels have tired you and I have a proposition for you
<Character>, a point at the end (after "you")
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Talk
Sir Ano: You've always seemed a generous sort of <Class Title>, so I thought you might be willing to consider my proposition?
<Class>, at the end is a point instead of the question mark
Above this line
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Sir Ano: Some people are born attractive; some have connections. And then there are those like me, making their own way in the world.
you can add:
A proposition?
Above this line
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Sir Ano: Ano de Berg'rac the Sixth. Lately a simple Squire, I was knighted along with others of my class and inducted into the Pactagonal Knighthood.
you can add:
Who are you?
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Sir Ano: Ano de Berg'rac the Sixth. Lately a simple Squire, I was knighted along with others of my class and inducted into the Pactagonal Knighthood.
Pactogonal
Above this line
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Sir Ano: Exactly! I've studied your recent adventures and it seems that beyond your talents, good looks, and gorgeous singing voice, you lead a charmed life.
you can add:
And that's where I come in?
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Sir Ano: Exactly! I've studied your recent adventures and it seems that beyond your talents, good looks, and gorgeous singing voice, you lead a charmed life.
talent
Above this line
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Sir Ano: Well, I need a bit of an edge to get noticed by the right people at Court. Sir Emony is the Knight in charge of visitors to the Court.
you can add:
Lending you success?
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Sir Ano: Well, I need a bit of an edge to get noticed by the right people at Court. Sir Emony is the Knight in charge of visitors to the Court.
Sir Ano: He refuses to even consider recruiting a new recruit to the King and his daughters.
I just need, introducing
Above this line
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Sir Ano: The eldest is so beautiful that half the Knights in the Keep spend their days off trying to impress her with their bravery.
you can add:
What about the princesses?
Above this line
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Sir Ano: Come with me, show me firsthand how a hero...heroes? Does his hero thing. Knight training focuses on fighting, but not how to BE a hero.
you can add:
How can I help?
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Sir Ano: Come with me, show me firsthand how a hero...heroes? Does his hero thing. Knight training focuses on fighting, but not how to BE a hero.
a space between the 3 points and "heroes"
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Sir Ano: They'll never think I've done the deeds if you're front and center. I'd let you keep all the gold and any booty we find, of course.
should be bolded
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Sir Ano: Once my fame is established, we can come out and call you... my mentor! You'll be known as <You>, the Hero-Maker. Fancy, huh?
<Character>
1 more line could be added:
Quests
Sir Ano: I'm sure that with your help, I'll learn just what I need to become a Hero and catch the King's attention!
Sir Baumbard's color code could be added:
[b][color=#3366cc]Sir Baumbard:[/color][/b]
quote:
Sir Baumbard: Ah, welcome adventurer. I am Sir Baumbard, and this is Glumbert, my Dragon.
dragon
Above this line
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Sir Baumbard: I am one of the elite order of DragonLords. We are protectors of this realm and will not hesitate to answer the call of those who need us.
you can add:
Who are you?
Above this line
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Sir Baumbard: Unless you are lucky enough to befriend an adult dragon, you must quest for your own dragon egg.
you can add:
DragonLord?
Above this line
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Sir Baumbard: Speak with Captain Rolith in the Keep when you have earned enough experience (level 3).
you can add:
How do I quest for a dragon?
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Sir Baumbard: Speak with Captain Rolith in the Keep when you have earned enough experience (level 3).
Sir Baumbard: Your quest will take you to Falconreach to the east where a small red moglin, Twilly, will guide you on the rest of your journey.
lvl 3, the small
Above this line
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Sir Baumbard: I was once of their Order.
you can add:
Are you a Pactagonal Knight?
Above this line
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Sir Baumbard: Word has gotten back to the King in Swordhaven that slimes and undead are amassing on edges of the Oaklore forest.
you can add:
Why are you here?
Above this line
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Sir Baumbard: The Green Slime Jello, in Sir Loin's Inn, while delicious, does not sit well when dive bombing on dragon back.
you can add:
Fires Over Oaklore
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Sir Baumbard: The Green Slime Jello, in Sir Loin's Inn, while delicious, does not sit well when dive bombing on dragon back.
Jellllo
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Sir Baumbard: As it turns out, I got terribly...airsick.
a space between the 3 points and "airsick"
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Sir Baumbard: Are you willing to go in my place and become a hero? I will go inside the Keep now and have the Knights clear the area
a point at the end (after "area")
And some corrections for the shops:
Book Return:
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Location: Oaklore Keep -> Enter shop with candle sign -> Maya -> Book Return
could be changed to: Book Delivery!
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Maya: Oh! Have you found some books? perhaps an ancient tome? Maybe you've found a history scroll?
Perhaps
Ironwood Box:
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Sir Valance: We must must [typo] be ever vigilant! Sneevils, the vile box obsessed creatures have been stealing every box in the area!
this line could be deleted as it doesn't make part of this dialog
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Sir Valance: It cost him a fortune but it will be worth every gold coin. These rings are just what we knights need to better defense Oaklore Keep.
defend
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Sir Valance: Here, you've earned one. As far as I'm concerned, you're an Honorary Knight of the Pactagonal Table, <your class>. Thank you.
i'm (typo)
Honorary Knight of the Pactogonal Table (all this should be bolded)
could be changed to: <Class>
Mage, Rogue & Warrior shops:
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Sir Lee: If you had to work with that cheerful Sir Pluss, you'd be surely too. D'you need a new weapon?
surly (typo)
Edit: added more corrections to finish Oaklore
A Hero Is Thawed:
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<Character>: Wha.... what happened?
after "wha" come 3 points instead of 4
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<Character> (thinks): ... I guess it's time to test my skill as a <Class>.....
<Character> (thinks): Y'know.. after I find a way down there.
both could be changed to: <Character> (thinking):, 4 points instead of 5 after <Class>
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Fantan: The ice crystal.... it's broken....
after "crystal" come 3 points instead of 4
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<Character> (thinks): Man, do I even get experience for this....
could be changed to: <Character> (thinking):
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Twilly: Whyyy iiiis iiiiit aaaalllllwaaaaaayyyyss meeeeee.....!
1 more "e"
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Rolith: Warlic started your thawing when he finally got free. Otherwise, you might never have gotten out!
the comma after "Otherwise" isn't written
Pac-toginal-tastic:
Its location could be modified a bit:
Oaklore Keep -> Captain Rolith / Maya -> Talk -> Oaklore Keep Quests! -> Pactogonal-tastic
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Captain Rolith: Have you ever wondered what a prospective Pactogonal Knight must go through to join our ranks?
could add above it:
In Books 1 and 2 Oaklore:
And Maya's dialog could be added:
In Book 3 Oaklore:
Maya: Have you ever wondered what a prospective Pactogonal Knight must go through to join their ranks?
See for yourself!
Back
Oaklore Keep (Book 3):
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Level/Quest/Items required: Completion of A Hero is Thawed
A Hero Is Thawed
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Quests Available
Falstaff
Training Ground
You can add, if needed:
Maya
Pac-toginal-tastic
On the NPCs list Sir Junn could be added as he has new dialogue in book 3.
quote:
Maya: Welcome to Oaklore Keep, home to the Knights of the Pactagonal Table and members of The Rose.... Oh my, is it really you, <Character>?
Pactogonal
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Offical Keep Quests
Maya: These Knights are at their stations throughout the Keep - all of them have different places to guard, and may need your help!
could be changed to:
Oaklore Keep Quests!
Maya: These Knights (and their quests) are at their stations throughout the Keep. All of them have different places to guard, and may need your help!
quote:
Falstaff
Maya: Falstaff, of The Rose, is organising training for all the Knights in the mass hall. Maybe you'd like to go and teach him a lesson?
mess
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If you're Level 3 or above:
Maya: WHAT?!
Maya: WHAT!?
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Maya: Ahem, I mean... *whispers* Whaaaaaaaat? You actually saw Captain Rolith?
after "Ahem" comes a point instead of the comma
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Maya: He told me to stay in case other heroes come looking... Do you remember anything that happened?
came
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Where can I spend Dragon Coins?
Maya: Cyesro's Superstore is in the town of Falconreach. You will find merchants that will take Dragon Coins all over Lore though.
Cysero
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Where can I find/upgrade my stats?
Maya: As you level up you'll gain more stat points. Choosing the Train Stats option while talking with me will let you use them!
a comma after "up"
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Maya: Hello again, <Character>! Welcome to Oaklore's library! Unfortunately, the shelves are getting bare...
the exclamation mark after "library" is actually a point, getting pretty bare, 1 more point after "bare"
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Maya: The Rose appeared after you were frozen... and they're sworn to end magic on Lore! By any means necessary!
they've
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Maya: Oh, and if you find books, please bring them to me. I love books! Especially rare ones.
find rare books (bolded too)
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Maya: And I need to replace the ones The Rose have taken...
1 more point at the end
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Maya: Some rare books contain legends, stories and secrets. Other tomes contain the works of thinkers, inventors and mages.
Others, of great thinkers, 3 points after "and", "mages" should have italic tags
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Talk
Sir Vivor: Hey watch this! We developed the fastest non-magical way to travel in the Kingdom!
a comma after "Hey"
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Sir Casm: Ohhh yeah this is reeeeeaallly going to work.....
3 points after "yeah", This
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Sir Junn: I think they've been hit with something large, heavy and ornate....
It's like
Sir Junn is missing some dialog:
Heal
Sir Junn: Let me tend to your wounds. We cover all PPO and HMO plans. There you go... good as new!
Potions
Sir Junn: There, I refilled your potions for you. You can use potions to restore your health and mana during battle.
quote:
Sir Preem: Welcome brave Hero! We are the Knights of the Pactagonal Table and we welcome you to join us in tales of glory and adventure!
Pactogonal
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<Character> (thinks): Man... no one has been here for years! I wonder what the Knights kept in here before The Rose came....
could be changed to:
<Character> (thinking):
been in here
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Sir Pernatural: Do you believe in Ghosts, Vampires and the living sorta-but not-really dead? They are real... I have proof!
Sir Pernatural: Do you believe in Ghosts, Spirits and the Living Sorta-But-Not-Really Dead? They are real... I have proof!
Above this line
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Sir Pernatural: Sir Koffagus was one of our greatest weapon masters. He had a HUGE weapon collection.
you can add:
Ghosts?
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Sir Pernatural: Sir Koffagus was one of our greatest weapon masters. He had a HUGE weapon collection.
should be bolded
quote:
Sir Pernatural: It is said that Sir Koffagus rises from his eternal slumber to challenge Adventures who visit his tomb.
challenge Adventurers who visit his tomb (all this should be bolded)
quote:
Sir Pernatural: ... and if you beat him *whispers* He will give you something from his collection! Do you want to go?
4 points after "him", a weapon
quote:
Talk
Falstaff: I swear...these "supposed" Knights are so soft, I doubt they've had a day of training in their lives!
a space between "swear..." and "these"
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Sir Prize: *Grumbles* With all these Rose guys here, I can't get away with anything fun...
grumbles, 1 more point at the end
Done, thanks. Try to avoid such a monstrous submission post, break it to smaller posts to spare my poor vision (it is allowed to double post here). [Niki]
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